Day 95. What kind of person would you say you are?

「Q&A Diary 英語で3行日記」（アルク刊）Q.095
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I have some strange obsessions, but I mostly live casually, going with the flow. Somehow things have always worked out for me, but this is my weekness because I didn’t always do my best for everything. I had done the best untill I practiced soccer in the club team. When I quit it, I can’t concentrate on anything. I have a courage to do things to some extent, but it always ends up to half result.

Revised Versions

Natural Version (100+ Words)

I have some unusual obsessions, but I mostly live casually, going with the flow. Somehow, things have always worked out for me, but this is my weakness because I haven’t always done my best in everything. I gave my all, while I had played soccer with the club team. When I quit the team, I couldn’t concentrate on anything else. I do have the courage to take on tasks to some extent, but they always end up only partially completed. Reflecting on this, I realize that my tendency to go with the flow sometimes prevents me from fully committing to my goals. I’m working on finding a balance between being flexible and staying dedicated to my responsibilities.

Casual Version (100+ Words)

I have some weird obsessions, but for the most part, I live pretty casually and just go with the flow. Somehow, things have always worked out for me, but that’s also my weakness because I haven’t always put in my best effort for everything. I was doing great until I started playing soccer with the club team. When I quit the team, I couldn’t focus on anything else. I do have some courage to take on things, but I always end up only doing them halfway. It’s frustrating because I want to commit fully, but I find myself falling short. I’m trying to figure out how to stay focused and give my best in everything I do.

Word Counts
• Original: 81
• Natural Version: 155
• Casual Version: 149

Score (original): 6/10

Summary: Your original paragraph conveyed your struggles with maintaining focus and commitment after quitting the soccer club. However, there were several grammatical errors, awkward phrasing, and unclear sentences. The revised versions correct these issues, enhance clarity, and provide a smoother flow while maintaining your original message about the challenges of staying dedicated.

Additional Tips:
1. Spelling and Grammar: Ensure correct spelling (e.g., “weekness” should be “weakness,” “untill” should be “until”). Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and proper tense usage.
2. Clarity and Precision: Be clear and precise in your statements. For example, instead of “half result,” use “partially completed” or “incomplete result.”
3. Consistent Tenses: Maintain consistent verb tenses throughout your writing to improve readability. Decide whether you’re speaking in past or present tense and stick with it.
4. Expand on Ideas: Provide more details to elaborate on your points. For instance, explain how quitting the soccer team affected your ability to concentrate.
5. Avoid Repetition: Eliminate repetitive phrases to make your writing more concise and engaging.
6. Use Connectors: Utilize connectors like “however,” “because,” and “therefore” to smoothly transition between ideas and add depth to your sentences.
7. Express Emotions Clearly: Share more about how you feel regarding your struggles to add emotional depth to your writing.
8. Sentence Structure: Vary sentence structures to make your writing more dynamic and less monotonous.

Keep practicing these aspects, and your writing will continue to improve!