海

小さい時から海が好きで、父がよく夏に海へ連れて行ってくれました。磯遊びやシュノーケリングをして遊びました。そう言う経緯もあって、大学は東京海洋大学へ。そこでは、海好きな友達が沢山いて、とても刺激を受けました。逆に、自分は海や魚が好きと思ってましたが、ガチ勢達にはとても敵わないことを痛感しました。今は違うことにも関心を抱いてますが、変わらず海も大好きです。

My father often took me to the sea in summer, so I have loved the sea since I was a little child. I used to play on the shore and snorkel. That's how I enrolled in the TUMSAT (Tokyo University of Marine Science And Technology). There, I was very inspired by many people who love the sea and fish. On the contrary, I realized that I couldn't compete with them on these topics. Although I have other interesting things now, I love the sea as much as ever too.

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My father often took me to the sea in summer, so I have loved the sea since I was a little child. I used to play on the shore and snorkel. That's why I enrolled in the TUMSAT (Tokyo University of Marine Science And Technology). There, I was very inspired by many people who love the sea and fish. On the contrary, I realized that I couldn't compete with them on these topics. Although I have other interesting things now, I love the sea as much as ever.

先生が書いた文章

My father often took me to the sea in the summer, which instilled in me a love for the ocean from a young age. I would play along the shore and snorkel, enjoying the beauty and wonder of the underwater world. This passion led me to enroll at TUMSAT (Tokyo University of Marine Science and Technology), where I was inspired by many individuals who shared a deep love for the sea and marine life. However, I soon realized that I couldn't compete with their extensive knowledge on these topics. Despite having new interests now, my love for the sea remains as strong as ever.

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