OREO Writing My favorite food
My favorite food is ice cream. Because it have many flavor . for example strawberry ,chocolate , and other many flavor so we never get bored. So from these reason I like ice cream.
chat GPT 先生の添削結果
以下のOREOライティングの英文を、文法、語彙、フローを改善して添削しました。
Original:
My favorite food is ice cream. Because it have many flavor . for example strawberry ,chocolate , and other many flavor so we never get bored. So from these reason I like ice cream.
Revised Version (OREO Structure):
Opinion:
My favorite food is ice cream.
Reason:
I like ice cream because it comes in many different flavors.
Example:
For example, some of my favorite flavors are strawberry and chocolate, but there are so many others to choose from that I never get bored of eating it.
Opinion restated:
That's why ice cream is my favorite food; it’s delicious and always offers something new to enjoy.
主な修正ポイント:
文法の修正:
"Because it have many flavor" → "because it comes in many different flavors"
「have」は単数形の "it" に対して不適切なので、"comes in" に変更し、"flavors" も複数形にしました。明確な例の提供:
"for example strawberry, chocolate, and other many flavor" → "some of my favorite flavors are strawberry and chocolate, but there are so many others"
具体的な例を挙げ、より自然で分かりやすくしました。理由を再述する部分の改善:
"So from these reason I like ice cream" → "That's why ice cream is my favorite food"
"from these reason" は不自然なので、"That's why" として結論部分をスムーズにしました。
OREO Writing についてはこちらで説明しています。
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