Why people tell lies OREO Writing
修正後：
Why People Tell Lies
I think people tell lies because they want to say something to entertain their friends, to benefit themselves, or to make a situation more amusing.For example, if I want to say something funny, I might say, "Look, there’s a UFO in the sky!" Similarly, if I want to joke with my friends, I might say, "No, it’s not true! That was a lie!"However, sometimes people tell lies for less positive reasons, even myself. For instance, if we are late for school, we might say something like, "I’m late because there was a dinosaur in the street!"This kind of lie isn’t always harmless or appropriate.In conclusion, I think there are two main types of lies: those we tell for ourselves and those we tell for others. There are many reasons why people tell lies, but understanding these reasons can help us use lies more thoughtfully.
修正前
I think people tell lies, because they went to say something for friends, something for them self or something funny. For example, if I went to say something funny I say 'look there’s UFO in the sky!' and if I want to say something for friends I'll say "No It’s not light! No It was a lie!". But how about for as we some time use lie for bud things even me, " it’s not light way to use lies I think. For example when we late to school we sometime say "Way I late for school because there’s a dinosaur in there !" this is not a light way to use lies I think. In conclusion I think there is two type of lies one is for our self two is for some one else I think there is many type of reasons "Why people tell lies.
Chat GPT先生の添削結果
1. タイトルの修正
Before:
Why people tell lies
After:
Why People Tell Lies
修正理由:
英語のタイトルは通常、主要な単語を大文字で始める「タイトルケース」を使用します。これにより正式な印象になります。
2. 最初の文
Before:
I think people tell lies, because they went to say something for friends, something for them self or something funny.
After:
I think people tell lies because they want to say something to entertain their friends, to benefit themselves, or to make a situation more amusing.
修正理由:
文法の修正: 「they went to」は過去形のミスで、「they want to」が正しい。
「for friends」や「for them self」: 不自然な表現を「to entertain their friends」や「to benefit themselves」に置き換え、意味を明確にしました。また、「them self」は「themselves」が正しい。
「something funny」: より自然なフレーズ「to make a situation more amusing」に変更。
3. 例文の修正
Before:
For example, if I went to say something funny I say 'look there’s UFO in the sky!' and if I want to say something for friends I'll say "No It’s not light! No It was a lie!".
After:
For example, if I want to say something funny, I might say, "Look, there’s a UFO in the sky!" Similarly, if I want to joke with my friends, I might say, "No, it’s not true! That was a lie!"
修正理由:
文法の誤り修正: 「if I went to say」は「if I want to say」が正しい。仮定の文を現在時制で統一しました。
引用符の使い方: 英文ではセリフの中に句読点（ピリオドやカンマ）を含める必要があります。例: "Look, there’s a UFO in the sky!"
「It’s not light」: 文脈に合わないため、「No, it’s not true」に置き換え。
4. 次の段落
Before:
But how about for as we some time use lie for bud things even me, " it’s not light way to use lies I think.
After:
However, sometimes people tell lies for less positive reasons, even myself.
修正理由:
文法と語彙の改善:
「how about for as we some time use lie for bud things」: 文構造が不自然で意味が伝わりにくいため、シンプルかつ正確な表現「sometimes people tell lies for less positive reasons」に変更しました。
「bud things」→「less positive reasons」: ネガティブな理由を指しているため適切な表現を選びました。
文の簡潔化: 冗長な部分を削り、意味を簡潔に伝えました。
5. 例文の修正
Before:
For example when we late to school we sometime say "Way I late for school because there’s a dinosaur in there !"
After:
For instance, if we are late for school, we might say something like, "I’m late because there was a dinosaur in the street!"
修正理由:
文法の改善:
「when we late to school」→「if we are late for school」: 正しい文法に修正。
「Way I late」→「I’m late」: 意味を考慮し、自然な形に修正しました。
語彙の改善: 「in there」→「in the street」: 文脈に適した表現に変更しました。
6. 意見の強化
Before:
this is not a light way to use lies I think.
After:
This kind of lie isn’t always harmless or appropriate.
修正理由:
文法修正: 「it’s not a light way to use lies」は文法的に正しくないため、シンプルで正確な表現に変更しました。
語彙の精度向上: 「light」という表現が曖昧だったため、「harmless or appropriate」と具体的にしました。
7. 結論部分
Before:
In conclusion I think there is two type of lies one is for our self two is for some one else I think there is many type of reasons "Why people tell lies.
After:
In conclusion, I think there are two main types of lies: those we tell for ourselves and those we tell for others. There are many reasons why people tell lies, but understanding these reasons can help us use lies more thoughtfully.
修正理由:
文法の修正:
「there is two type of lies」→「there are two main types of lies」: 主語（types）が複数形なので、動詞も複数形（are）に修正しました。また、「main」を加え内容を補強。
「our self」→「ourselves」, 「some one else」→「others」: 正しい形に修正。
構成の改善: 結論の流れを整理し、「but understanding these reasons...」を追加して深みを持たせました。
まとめ
修正後の文章は、以下の点で改善されています：
文法の正確性: 誤りを修正し、正しい形にしました。
語彙の適切性: より自然で適切な表現を選びました。
論理的な流れ: 論点が明確になるよう段落を整理しました。
読みやすさ: 冗長な部分を削除し、簡潔にまとめました。