OREO Writing My favorite subject
My favorite subject is math. Because I think I like math. For example my mom praises me. and I'm entrusted at thinking about answer. For example if I do any math work I think I want to complete it.
chat GPT先生の添削結果
Original:
My favorite subject is math. Because I think I like math. For example my mom praises me. and I'm entrusted at thinking about answer. For example if I do any math work I think I want to complete it.
Revised Version (OREO Structure):
Opinion:
My favorite subject is math.
Reason:
I like math because it challenges me to think and solve problems.
Example:
For example, my mom often praises me when I do well in math, which motivates me to work harder. I also enjoy the satisfaction of solving difficult problems and always feel determined to complete my math work.
Opinion restated:
This is why math is my favorite subject—it encourages me to think critically and helps me improve my problem-solving skills.
主な修正ポイント:
文法の修正:
"Because I think I like math" → "because it challenges me to think and solve problems"
より明確で意味のある理由に修正しました。不自然な表現の修正:
"I'm entrusted at thinking about answer" は不自然な表現なので、"it challenges me to think and solve problems" に変更し、より自然な表現にしました。具体例をわかりやすく:
"For example if I do any math work I think I want to complete it" → "I always feel determined to complete my math work"
文を簡潔にし、意図を明確にしました。フローを改善:
文の流れをよりスムーズにし、論理的な展開にしました。
これで文章全体がより自然で、伝わりやすくなったと思います。
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