Day 38. Do you visit anywhere often?

「Q&A Diary 英語で3行日記」（アルク刊）Q.038
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I often visit a nearby outlet mall because the city where I live now has no place to buy clothes which I like. When I want to go shopping, I need to drive for about an hour. There are so great value at outlet shops, but it is incovinient for me to take a deive for an hour. Moreover, there is no comedy shows nor theater stages. I like watching a musical and stage because I can get in touch with the art and culture directly. That’s why I am really disapointed to the city in which the company let me live.

Original Word Count: 129

Corrected version

1. Natural Version

I often visit a nearby outlet mall because the city where I currently live doesn’t have any stores that sell clothes I like. When I want to go shopping, I have to drive about an hour to get there. The outlet shops offer great deals, but it’s inconvenient to spend so much time driving. On top of that, there are no comedy shows or theater stages in this city. I love watching musicals and stage performances because they allow me to experience art and culture directly. For these reasons, I feel disappointed with the city where my company assigned me to live.

Revised Word Count: 113

2. Casual Version

I often drive to a nearby outlet mall because the city I live in now doesn’t have any stores with clothes I like. If I want to shop, I have to drive an hour to get there. The outlet stores have great deals, but spending so much time driving is annoying. Plus, this city doesn’t have any comedy shows or theaters. I really enjoy musicals and stage performances because they let me experience art and culture up close. That’s why I’m pretty disappointed with the city my company made me move to—it just doesn’t have the things I love.

Revised Word Count: 109