Day 36. What is the most expensive item that you have on today?
The most expensive item that I have on today is a silver bracelet made by Maison Margiela. It is kind of a chain bracelet and has a silver name tag. That tag is iconic and much cool for me. It was 165,000 yen, so really expensive for me, but I am satisfied with it because if I just wear the T-shirt and normal pants, it’s gonna be cool with that item. Moreover, it doesn’t look like high bland item because there is no brand logo on the surface. I don’t like an item with brand logo on it.
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Corrected Version
1. Natural Version
The most expensive item I’m wearing today is a silver bracelet by Maison Margiela. It’s a chain-style bracelet with a silver name tag. The tag is iconic and looks super cool to me. It cost 165,000 yen, which is very expensive for me, but I’m completely satisfied with it. Even if I’m just wearing a plain T-shirt and simple pants, the bracelet adds a stylish touch to my outfit. What I like most is that it doesn’t look like a high-end brand item because there’s no brand logo on it. I’ve never liked wearing items with logos—they feel too flashy.
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2. Casual Version
The most expensive thing I’m wearing today is a silver bracelet by Maison Margiela. It’s a chain bracelet with a silver name tag, and I think it looks really cool. It cost me 165,000 yen, which was super pricey, but I’m really happy with it. Even if I’m just wearing a T-shirt and normal pants, the bracelet makes my outfit look much cooler. The best part is that it doesn’t have any brand logos on it, so it doesn’t scream “expensive.” I’m not a fan of items with big logos—they’re just too flashy for my taste.
Revised Word Count: 111