2024/04/16

2024年4月16日 15:35

●添削前

I had a cold about a week ago.
It was a bad cold and has not been completely cured ~~completely~~ yet.
My fever ~~went~~was high, and my nose wouldn't stop running.
Now, I ~~haven't~~ don't have a fever, but I feel dull.
~~For a long time,~~It's been a long time since I have~~n't~~ had a cold.,
Sso I have forgotten ~~that to catch a cold~~ how hard and tiring it ~~was~~can be to catch a cold.
I think it's going to take for a while.

●添削後

I had a cold about a week ago.
It was a bad cold and has not been completely cured yet.
My fever was high, and my nose wouldn't stop running.
Now, I don't have a fever, but I feel dull.
It's been a long time since I've had a cold, so I've forgotten how hard and tiring it can be to catch a cold.
I think it's going to take a while.

*Grammar stuff

・鼻水がとまらない＝ won't stop running

・My fever went high ⇒ My fever was high
"My fever went high" は短期間の変化を表し、"My fever was high" は持続的な状態を表すと言えます。
※ go＝動作動詞なので、（短期間の）変化を表し、be＝状態動詞なので、状態を示す

For a long time, I haven't had a cold.　⇒　It's(has) been a long time since I've had a cold.
※現在完了形はこんな風に使うのかと思った

So I'd forgotten that to catch a cold how hard and tiring it was. ⇒　I've forgotten how hard and tiring it can be to catch a cold.

"how hard and tiring it can be" は、直訳すると「どれほど厳しくて疲れることができるか」となりますが、実際には「風邪をひくことがどれほどつらく、疲れるか」という意味です。"how" は「どれくらい」という意味で、"hard and tiring" は「つらい、疲れる」という形容詞の組み合わせです。"it can be" は「...する可能性がある」という意味で、風邪をひくことのつらさや疲れを指します。

※ can を使うことで、「時には」的なニュアンスがでる。

It is hard.（難しい）⇒
It can be hard.（難しかったりもする）

She’s selfish.（彼女はわがまま）⇒
She can be selfish.（わがままだったりもする）

●おまけ（ネイティブっぽくとお願いしてみた）

I had a really bad cold about a week ago, and it still hasn't completely cleared up.
My fever was high, and my nose was running non-stop.
While I don't have a fever anymore, I still feel a bit off.
It's been so long since I last had a cold that I've forgotten how tough it can be.
I think it's going to take some time to fully recover.

*Prompt

その１.
Can you correct my English?
--Can you show me the points and reasons that you corrected?
--Can you show me the points and reasons that you corrected using a table?
--Can you rewrite the sentence to sound more native?

その２.
・What are the points for English beginners to write an English diary?

その３.
#Instructions :
・You are an American professional English teacher. Please output your best correction based on the following constraints and input sentences.

#Constraints :
・The text should be easy to understand for a TOEIC score of 575.
・Keep sentences concise.
・Correct any grammatical errors or more appropriate expressions.
・Show me the points and reasons that you corrected using a table.

#Input :
＜日記本文＞

その４.
#Instructions :
・You are an American professional English teacher. Please output your best correction based on the following constraints and input sentences.

#Constraints :
・Rewrite the sentence to sound more native.

#Input :
＜文＞